but my eyes are confused by the centered formatting -- I imagine this to be left or right... and if I get the gist of this -- the feeling of centeredness is part of conclusion in the tongues of fire.

but I'm a little lost...in the words too. I like the mercurial wrists and broad bent shoulders, half-stoppered fingerholds -- sounds like hiking (climbing) a mountain.

did you stop on a silver shag of dense ground cover.. the transitions from we to Madison/Max to he are confusing...
and the Doth seems insincere.

if your conclusion stems from a quote that inspired you, I'd add the quote at the beginning to introduce it to the reader ... I am intriqued by this piece... just confused.

Oh, and maybe Harmoni or others can help here, but I don't use commas at the end of a line, and I'm guilty of overuse of the ellipses ..

keeps the tension --
now that I reread it...
I'm reconsidering my earlier post.

No, I wouldn't say it's rubbish at all.
In fact, it's a very strong piece but I agree that it needs some reworking.
1st- I'd do away with the centered formatting, for sure. It detracts from subtle emphasis that could be made through line breaks etc. As a rule, I fine there are very few occasions on which centering strengthens a poem and in this case it weakens it.
Another formatting tip- I would do away with the punctuation and the caps at the head of each line. Let the line breaks be your punctuation. Let caps signify the start of a new thought. It will make the reading smoother and heighten the reader's involvement.

In terms of the actual poem, the imagery and wording?
It's beautiful and very strong. It's vivid and still somehow vague- dreamlike, surreal.
However, the last strophe falls flat.
Only he learnt,
By the tongues of the fire,
Doth fibrous connection reside.
The word learnt felt too clunky to me, broke the rhythm. In the second line the could be deleted to make the image more immediate. And I agree with the above comment that Doth feels out-of-place and, yes, insincere.
I would try something along the lines of:
Only he found,
by tongues of fire,
the place where
fibrous connections reside.

...Or something in this vein, anyway. I find the ambiguity of the piece enchanting but feel there should be something more to bring it all home at the close.
But it's a piece with a ton of potential and one that I look forward to seeing as it progresses.

I'm in line with Harmoni and 70sgirl on this. It's good. This is what I would tinker with, were it mine...
Shove everything to left, lose caps and most punctuation, change doth to simply does.
The line breaks are really good as they are, in my opinion. There is a lovely amount of truth conveyed with a sparsity of words here. It's exactly the kind of thing I like to read.