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Vintage 70s GirlPoetry and Prose from personal experiences.
alone in a tuck of sheets . . . where earlier she folded in his embrace Sunlight teases a summons rise Cajoling rival shadow to retreat In winks through shuttered blinds askew Abstract perspective cloaks the muse reflected in a play of light . . . that reaches to touch her silhouette. 70s Girl - July 14, 2009
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I changed the tense of the ending "to reaches to touch" rather than "reaching across" to make it more connected... does it work? I eliminated window connection to blinds... and like the tighter feel of this...
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June 26, 2011
Light of Love gone
Within moments I was in that same room "alone in a tuck of sheets...", or one like it. Quickly moving me with the shadows I know you brought to my mind. I found it real to have the light playing between the slats in the blinds... being the only thing to touch her now.
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September 07, 2011
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